Thank you Alan for submitting the first composition from a Primary 1 pupil since the beginning of this project ' I Can Write Too!'.
You have great potential!
Do not be afraid to experiment with new words and phrases!
No problem if you do not use them correctly. Try and you'll learn along the way!
Keep writing!
Dear Sgmamadreams,
ReplyDeleteThanks for your comments / corrections to Alan’s ‘A Protective Mother’. We love the part ‘Alex’s leg felt like jelly’ it has turned the 3rd paragraph alive. He has learnt and applied this phrase instantly. You have also pointed out the part which he has neglected like ‘soon Alex reached the nest to get another egg’. Thanks again for all the detailed explanation!
Alan was ecstatic to see his ‘transcript’ posted on the ‘blog’ and he clearly enjoys his ‘writing game’ more and more. Thanks for boosting Alan’s writing spirit!
Hello Alan MaMa, Thank you for leaving feedback on both my blog and website! You are most welcomed and have a great weekend ahead! Happy Children's Day, Alan!!!!!! : )
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