Basic Vocabulary for Writing - Injuries

Please see Basic Vocabulary for Writing - Introduction for details about the objective of this series / section in my blog.

Simple Vocabulary 
These are some common descriptions used by beginning writers. 
The list is not exhaustive.

1) Alan fell down. He was hurt. He was bleeding a lot.

2) The doctor checked on Mrs Lim. She had broken her bone and needed an operation.

3) At the hospital, the doctor checked Minah. She had a blood clot in her head. She needed an operation.


Basic Vocabulary
These are some common descriptions expected of middle primary and weaker upper primary writers.

If your child is at P3 - P4 and cannot describe injuries as given, you may want to get him to attempt using these sentences for his practices at home. 

(Ugly truth...MEMORIZE...) because this is very BASIC.

For P5 and above this is not an option. You MUST KNOW this!

1) Alan lost his balance and fell. He had cuts on his knee. Blood was flowing profusely (how was it flowing) from the wound.

2) The doctor examined Mrs Lim. She had broken an arm ( a leg) and needed an operation.

3) At the emergency room, the doctor examined Minah. She had a blood clot in her brain. It was a serious injury. She needed an operation immediately.


Enhancing the Basic
These are some improvements a student can make to improve on the basics. i.e. add in details, adjectives, reasons. (No extensive and new vocabulary)

If your child has grasps the basics i.e. is able to write injuries as above, introduce him to adding details and such to improve on the basics. This can (not will, as scoring still depends on how the whole composition is written and the grammar used) push his / her content and language up a point / band when graded.

1) Alan lost his balance and fell hard onto the ground (where). He had grazed his knee. Blood was oozing profusely from the deeper wounds (from which wounds).

2) The doctor examined Mrs Lim thoroughly. She had fractured her arm (leg) and needed an operation to realign the bones (why operation?).

3) At the emergency room, the doctor examined Minah. He detected a blood clot in her brain. As the blood clot could cause a stroke (why so serious?), the doctor immediately performed an operation to remove it (what the doctor did and why).

To be continued...